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Admiration

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Created by wolfstargazer on Monday, July 21, 2008

I cannot stop, I cannot breathe
A step too slow or too late
it will take over me
it will not hesitate

so I have to move, I have to dance
I have to smile and to be
I have to live while I got the chance
before it catches up to me

Because They've left me all alone
and these feelings live
by myself and the feelings rome
and to emotions I give

A part of my life, a part of my day
This person is apart of my heart
they weren't here to stay
But they left me beter than the start

They've made me laugh now they make me cry
they've made me smile
and now I wonder why
That joy could only be for a while

They move on with their life
to bigger better things
without any pain or strife
and yet my heart still stings

I know that I should laugh
and not be holding back tears
because they are happy
and will be for many years

But once again I cannot stop
for I might cry
and I shouldn't reflect
because I might just die

But they needed to go and finaly depart
so many people there couldnt be room for me
Me who's known them as little and not from the start
But that Ill missthem like crazy is more than a possibility

Andyet they could laugh
while tears stood in my eyes
I looked away from them
and thus never really said my "goodbye"s

I'll try to remember their smile
how could any of us forget
their cunning smirk about their robe
and their grin when mentioning his tea set

They are always full of insane joy
Good for a joke or a jibe
always nice to talk to
It's wonderful to know people like this are alive

More than any other emotion I'd say it was admiration
Was it only that? Well sort of yes and sort of no
There was love of a hero and hurt from seperation
But he's going to have a crazy life good old Psyco

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